Monday, October 25, 2010

my fav friends

Ortega Cristian
Intermediate English III
Prof. Pablo Acosta Acosta
Writing Task 01
October 7, 2010
My favorite friend
Every day I meet and share all my time with some people, I spend the most of my time with them, and that’s good! Because I don’t get bored and smiles are always in my face,  but I have to learn that friends are not those who make me laugh are those who cry with me and understand and help me with all mistakes that I do. So for me a good friend is someone reliable, that’s the most important characteristic; sometimes we have funny friends, they always make us laugh but in any moment they just leave us alone, in that moment when we really need them, so they are just like simply circus’s clowns, we know they behave as stupid and sometimes is nice, but they can say, good bye and find other friends, while we are in the middle of the dark and there’s no hope. So a funny person is not always someone that makes us happy.  Now if we really now that our closest friend is always boring but understandable that’s not a problem, we share the time together and we try to make the moment better.
A smart person or intelligent could be a good friend, but I have to trust and believe everything he/she says, and time is always the best gift that life can give us for making and learning  the most about someone that is going to be always with us or just share a piece of our lives. An intelligent person can take advantage of our niceness and can steal our emotions, feelings and all beautiful times we have lived through, just for his or her goals. So a friend reliable is better than a brain or a laugh.

2 comments:

  1. HEY!

    -You would use more transitions to connect the paragraphs.

    -"...with some people..." (MR) You could use some adjetive or give more context.

    -"..me laugh are (P) those who..."

    -"...with me and (UW)(P) understand (MW) and help me with all mistakes that I do.(WW)"

    -"...characteristic; (P) sometimes..."

    -"...behave as (WW) stupid..."

    -"...can say, (P) good bye..."

    -".Now if we really now (SP) that..."

    -"...everything he/she (UW) says"

    -Very nice essay, clear to be read and has a flowing structure.

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